Thursday, 21 June 2012

Editing facepalms: Adverbs

A chat between me and one of the directors at Curiosity Quills about a book I'm editing for them:

Verity: "Toxic chemicals blended underfoot with foul excrement, creating dangerous colors that twinkled with suspicious luminescence. " Adverb overkill! FATALITY! Also, 'foul excrement', not to be confused with that sweet-smelling, decorative excrement.

Eugene: Ah, decorative excrement... the poop of unicorns.

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